Third draft - film feedback

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• Its a bit of a quick transition from the titles at the beginning to the start of the film.
• Cant hear whats been said, the wind is too loud. 
• The conversations go on for too long.
• The sound and tying of the shoe lace doesn't link. Could the sound come up with the balloon instead.
• You need the noise of the balloon bursting. The clown is still too obvious? Can you blur it? Why is he not trying to get away? Could the lamppost be in the way as he tries to get away?
• The flashback with the scream needs to be more prominent. 
• Clearer shot of the grabbing of the knife off the wall and the axe coming down. Its too quick.
• Axe attack is not very clear, when he's hit, blur it again like you have previously. 
• The water scene needs to be clearer - what is happening?
• More sound/noise needed when Rajan's being attacked to contrast this with the bird sang. 
• Vj ordering the taxi - The sound doesn't fit. He needs to be more panicked and a sense of urgency needed. 
• Get rid of the shot after he's got into the car. The door should shut and then jump to him in the back of the taxi.
• Vj needs to be scared and the taxi scene needs to be seen as a safe haven momentarily fulling us into a false sense of security. 
• The two clowns that come out of nowhere, it needs to be evident that there's two clowns from the start of the film otherwise it makes no sense.