Teacher feedback for review - first draft

I changed my review based on the feedback i got from my media teachers. I was told to change the style of the writing; mainly because i was giving away to much of the story line to the audience. Therefore i changed the whole paragraph that was based on the plot, i made sure it was short but effective. I also changed the layout style, enlarging the pictures and writing out more text was effective as people tend to get bored of reading quite easily therefore i made sure i would grab their attention by adding colour and pictures from the film.